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Thursday 2 August 2018

Perfect Punctuation


Meerkats
This is a story I have been writing in my writing session where we have been focusing on punctuation.


One day I woke up and poked my head out of my burrow along with
some of my siblings.Then we saw it the first ever pinokio fruit this marks the first day of spring. We all got up and tried to get the fruit.Then out of know where a big old mean volcher came and stole our fruit.

“Should we chase it,” I said.
“Yesss,” shouted my sister’s.
“We need a plan,” My big sister Addi said.
“What are we going to do,”said my little sister  Lily.
“I have a plan,” said Addi.
“What is it,” I said. 
Addi said, “All we have to do is run as fast as we can then I’ll jump and try to grip onto his claws then you to have to jump onto me”.
“Lets go,” I said.

We ran as fast as we could we finally caught up to the voucher, then Addi jumped up and caught the vouchers feet then I grabbed Addi feet and lily grabbed my feet.Now all we had to do is distracted the voucher to make it fly into the cliff so he will drop it.Them we will put it in the tree. The voucher was flying all over the place it finally flow into the tree.

“This is our chance,”Addi shouted.
“OK,”Lily and I said together.
“Lets run,” said Addi.

Addi grabbed pinokio fruit and we ran back to the tree. When we got back to the tree we were lucky because nobody else was a wake. Addi threw it up but it fell and splattered everywhere so that was the last of that.

I would really like to know how I could make my punctuation in this story better ?


1 comment:

  1. I love your story Neila!
    I like the names of your characters!
    Harriet

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